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Some people claim that too much focus and resources have been spent to protect wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many can argue that the amount spent to protect
wild life
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 is exaggerated. In my point of view,
this
 spending and attention is justified and should be encouraged. Looking at budgets, some people are claiming that the resources that are directed toward preserving
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 can be used to fund health and education sectors.
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, they claim that the extinction of any species does not affect our daily lives. As we know, that cannot be
further
 from the truth, despite the importance of sectors
as
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 health and education,
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 important to take care of the ecological system, which depends on every element of it.
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, in case of birds were to extinct, there would be a loss of a very critical medium to transfer seeds from one location to another. On the same hand, resources and attention should be directed to protecting the environment, because the human race is the highest contributor to the damage affecting it. To illustrate, in the
last
 ten years, more species have extinct because of pollution and deforestation than in the
last
 century. If no action is taken to fix these issues and to preserve nature's wilderness, it
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 to assume that people will suffer from severe consequences. In conclusion, Despite the fact that the amount of focus and financial resources spent on the
wellbeing
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 of animals and birds, I strongly disagree
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 the reduction of them,
on the contrary
, more efforts should be made to help the preservation effort of
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wild life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wildlife conservation
  • ecosystem preservation
  • sustainable development
  • biodiversity
  • habitat destruction
  • ecological balance
  • ethical responsibility
  • economic benefits
  • endangered species
  • poaching
  • education and awareness
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