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Many students Around The World do not choose science subject at University give the reasons for this and describe the impact on community.

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The statistics that many students avoid
science
 classes lean me towards the assumption that
this
 is a conscious avoidance of reality
along with
 fear of the precise subjects. Despite the fact that art, poetry and philosophy are greatly interfered in our lives math and physics are fundamental not only for understanding humanity itself but
also
 for discovering the Universe. Definitely, there is a portion of youngsters who are not good at calculations or have less structural imagination and memory capacity.
However
, the main reason for not choosing
science
 classes is fear of scale and depth that require full immersion.
For example
, history and literature could be divided into periods and separated into sections that are easier to cover.
On the other hand
, exact sciences are presented as one whole field, which can't be comprehended separately. The
first,
the incredible progress of our civilization became possible because of the development of
science
.
Consequently
, life standard and life expectancy sharply increased which, in turn, reduced suffering through medicine and technologies.
For example
, the fabrication history of the MRA apparatus has close relations with the space exploration process that revealed a number of discoveries which had been implemented in our daily lives. Deducing on these cases we can foresee missed opportunities if there is a lack of people in these fields.
To conclude
,
while
 many students prefer general subjects it is important to encourage more youngsters to pick up
science
 classes as there is a demand for bright minds capable of solving the biggest mysteries of the World.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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