The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer. and the poor are even getting poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?
Nowadays, the accelerating
income
gap
is wider, which has worsened plenty of adverse issues in the world
including the extreme brain
drain
phenomenon and the massive migrants
flow from undeveloped Fix the agreement mistake
migrant
countries
to developed nations
. There is a general consensus that offering educational programmes in poor countries
is the most optimal way to eradicate this
conundrum holistically.
To begin
with
the wider and wider Add a comma
,with
income
gap
in the world
have
exacerbated a wide range of vexing problems. The foremost aftermath is the migration to industrialized Correct subject-verb agreement
has
nations
in the first world
from the less developed nations
at
many social statuses with the common purpose is finding Change preposition
of
the
better conditions. Correct article usage
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In particular
, many Africans from poverty countries
have crossed the sea in their wood boat with the hopeful movement to any European countries
, where
they consider as the paradive because they can find Correct word choice
which
a
better Correct article usage
apply
job
and higher living Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
standard
with adequate public services. Fix the agreement mistake
standards
As a result
, this
massive migration has led to many social issues in some capitalism
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capitalist
nations
, such
as France where usually
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there have
happened
many protests, burglaries and pickpocketing cases in the streets since some poverty Verb problem
been
African
were allowed to refugee in Fix the agreement mistake
Africans
this
nation. While
, in the US, the government constructed metal fences along their border with Mexico to stop the flow of illegal immigrants from many nationalities, which menaced the social stability of the surrounding community that located
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was located
nearly
the cross. Change the word
near
Furthermore
, youngsters in developing nations
have enrolled in many overseas universities with the utmost expectation that exposure the
better education background and become Correct article usage
a
a
global Correct article usage
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citizen
. Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
As a consequence
, this
has aggravated the brain
drain
in developing nations
as their geniuses have accepted to work for multinational corporations with extraodinary
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extraordinary
salary
and exceptional welfare.
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salaries
However
, all of these problems commonly stem from the poor quality
in
academic institutions, which only can be solved by promoting educational programs with the assistance of foreign professors in many aspects especially in science subjects from developed Change preposition
of
nations
. Upgrading the quality
of workforce
not only could narrow the Correct article usage
the workforce
income
gap
to some extent but also
enhance the living standard. In the long term, this
approach might holistically address the stultifying echo of brain
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the brain
drain
issue, such
as in India, as
providing Change preposition
by
the
higher educational Correct article usage
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quality
and better working conditions. Besides
, the government should reform stricter their progressive tax system in order to reallocate the welfare in any society, and
whose national budget can allow the poor access to medical services and own a house.
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To conclude
, despite many ramifications issues including social riots and brain
drain
in the world
, it is advisable that this
income
gap
only could
be addressed by providing better educational Verb problem
apply
quality
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