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The influence of social media has increased many folds in people’s lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon

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It is true that social media become a lot of time in
people
's
lives
, and it is a universal problem that many
people
 see developing in their
lives
, In
this
 essay, I will discuss my opinion that its advantages overwigh than the negatives way. First of all ,
i
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 will show the positive sides of social media effects , which make our
lives
 easy and enjoyable, The communication improvement makes everything better , like shopping , education , meetings, and
overall
, relationships keep going the best way
this
 day.,
secondly
 , benefits of it many
people
 trend to the audience to show them their talent and most of the popular
people
 have a channel that earning money from it .Instance, Facebook, Twitter, Instagram.
In contrast
 , there are a few disadvantages, that can lead to it , exemplifying , civil problems and sometimes the government can not keep them under control,
Moreover
, many
people
 have been finding wrong information , because they believe what they read ,
such
 as the correct news . In conclusion, the light sides are more than the dark ones, for all those reasons that have a good impact we can say that social media can play a vital role in our
lives
 if we
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 in the right ways with full
careful
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 to develop our society .
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