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The graph below shows the amount of good transported in the UK.

The graph below shows the amount of good transported in the UK.
This
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 report derives from the graph, which illustrates the number of products which
are
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 transported by four different methods in the United Kingdom (UK) between 1974 and 2002. A good starting point would be to say that, the freeway led the pack over the years shown, whilst the pipeline was the least.
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which
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used for transportation increased significantly except railways. The first result worth pointing out is that
,
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 roads led the pack between with approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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 and around 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and 2002, respectively. The railway followed its placement with nearly 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974, but in the next
years
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 railway usage experienced a decrease.
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, its placement was replaced by ships in 1978. In 2002,
water way
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waterway
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 was chosen for more than 600
million
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tonnes
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 for transportation. Another piece of information that can be observed is that
,
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 the pipeline, which was used for transport of nearly 3
million
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tonnes
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, was not a popular choice in 1974. But in the following years, it increased rapidly
,
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 and finished the competition with over 20
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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, railways transported more than 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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