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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, didided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, didided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The chart illustrates the total
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minutes
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 of UK telephone calls in three different criteria (local, national and international and mobiles) from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, the
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 of local calls, which
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 connected from fixed lines, was always the highest
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 per
billion
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minutes
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 in the given period,
while
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 the
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 of
mobile
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 was the lowest. The
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total
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 of
minutes
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belonged to
mibiles
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mobiles
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 (all calls) was significantly increased in the 8 given years. In 1995,
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people in the United Kingdom used approximately 3
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minutes
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 from their mobiles, which is the lowest reported
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 in the chart. In the next 8 years,
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 experienced a sizeable change and rose significantly from approximately 5
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minutes
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 in 1996 to around 50
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minutes
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 in 2002. In the case of national and international calls by fixed lines, almost 37
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minutes
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werecalled
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were called
 by UK citizens, which
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dramatically increased to just over 60 in 2002. The local calls by fixed lines experienced a different trend. From 1995 to 1999 , the
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 of
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 for local calls dramatically climbed from almost 70 to below 90 respectively.
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, after 1999,
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moderately decreased to almost 70, which was similar to the first year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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