Some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children , while other people disagree for number of reasons . Consider both side of this debate and reach a conclusion .

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plays a vital role
ifor
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in
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however
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some people
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that
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not
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good option for them.
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before offering my own opinion on
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matter. To commence with , Convent
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a plethora of advantages to students. First and foremost is quality
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structured
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environment to
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which will eventually develop discipline,
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as
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strong work ethics.
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, Living
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in military
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saves a huge amount of
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pupils. If students don't have to travel from home to
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it saves
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plenty of
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and they can devote their selves to
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more and
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good grades
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exams. Another point is that it brings diverse
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experience
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children
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come to study from various
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background
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, it will broaden
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good always comes with bad.
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some drawbacks too.
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with, the most significant
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disadvantage
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the sepration
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sepration
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separation
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often miss their
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whilst in boarding
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and feel isolated.
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, pupils feel less connected to their
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after spending so much
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feel that
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parents
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not understand
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as
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friends.
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,
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pupils
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pressure and stress as convent
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more
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on studies and
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academic
results rather than
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extracurricular
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therefore
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student
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too much stress about their grades and it will eventually affect their mental health. Not only
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but they have limited freedom as they can not go to play games
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their
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school
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decides that.
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this
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type of
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's financial cost is higher than normal one. To summarise, all the points aforementioned above some people think that convent
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the best choice for child
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some believe that
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best option for
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for numerous reason. I strongly agree with the
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argument as
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often feel lonely and stressed at boarding
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therefore
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military
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are not
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option
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