The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The provided outlines
shows
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the differences between
two
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timelines of
central
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library
. The timelines
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20
years
ago and
present
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time.
Overall
, 20
years
back the entrance was decorated with tables and chairs.
Whereas
if you see the reception now there is no furniture. Back
then
the
children
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room
was different from the gaming
room
.
However
,
currently
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there is no gaming
room
and
special
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storytelling stage is made for kids with
special
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arrangement of fiction books. It is
also
noticiable
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noticeable
that in the past there was no lecture
room
, but there is an arrangement of lecture
room
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. Twenty
years
back
adult's
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book section was divided into two parts;
however
,
this
time adult corner includes
information
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the information
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desk
,
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and
self service
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machines. In the past, there was no cafeteria in the
library
, but now there is a cafe.
Also
, there is
new
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computer
room
just close to
entrance
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the entrance
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for the
library
user.
To sum up
, The floor plan of a public
library
is
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now changed a lot
from
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in
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twenty
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, room with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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