The pie chart and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000

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about

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the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000. Education levels by gender in 2010 (any ages), in

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women

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all ages, the highest is no

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with 38%,

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university

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men

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all ages, the highest is no qualification with 35%,

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university

degree

is 32%. Education levels by age range (Glassgow, 2010), in the 16-24,

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school

ceretificate

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certificate

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in detail.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words qualifications, school, university, degree with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.

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The pie chart and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000

Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views, give own opinion.

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Some people say that too much time and resources are spent on the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinino? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children.