IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

You have received a job offer for an exciting, new position. Although you are expected to start on September 7th, you are only available to start a week later due to personal reasons. Write a letter to your new boss. In your letter: Express your enthusiasm for the job offer. Explain the problem Suggest what you can do

Dear Mr Singh, I hope you are doing well. I would like to express my sincere enthusiasm for the opportunity to join your organisation, and I am truly looking forward to starting my new role.
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, I regret to inform you that I may not be able to commence work on September 7th as planned
due to
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 an unforeseen personal situation. My mother has recently been unwell and is currently hospitalised in Surrey. As my brother is out of town, I am the only one available to take care of her during
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 time. In light of
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, I kindly request
if
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that
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 it would be possible for me
to begin
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 my role one week later than the scheduled date. I assure you that I remain fully committed to
this
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 position, and I would be happy to make up for the delay by putting in additional hours once I begin work. I sincerely appreciate your understanding and consideration. Yours sincerely, Saransh Sharma

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but you can add one more clear line about what work you can do before the new start day, like online training or reading files.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow. To make it even better, you can use one more linking word, like 'therefore' or 'because of this', to show the change in plan.
task response
For task response: You clearly show joy for the job, explain the problem well, and give a good way to help after the late start.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear order, polite start and end, and each paragraph has one main idea.
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