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Tests and examinations are a central feature of school systems in many countries. Do you think the education benefits of testing outweigh any disadvantages?

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The presented bar chart highlights data about how many
men
 and
women
 take
further
education
 (full-time or part-time) in three different time periods in the UK. Units are measured in thousands of people.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the large differences between
two
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the two
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 genders can be seen in part-time
education
 in 1970/71. Another interesting point is that part-time
education
 was more popular than full-time
education
. Looking at the details, as regards part-time
education
, 1000
men
 received it in 1970/71,
whereas
 the figure was 100 less in 1980/81, with 900, which is 50 less than in 1990/91, with 950. In the case of
women
, the
number
 was almost the same (around 800) in 1970/71 and in 1980/81. In the next decade, the
number
 of
women
 was 1100. Regarding full-time
education
, the
number
 of
women
 who studied was nearly half as much as
men
, with only 50 in 1970/71,
while
, in 1980/81, there were 200
women
 and 180
men
 respectively. In 1990/91, it was the same
number
 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 who took full-time
further
education
 (250).
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