Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. discuss both views and give your opinion

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again.

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a winner. They have to address a

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self-motivation and agile to solve their own problem. Learning in a formal education is open wide range in order to solve

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a certain situation. Most

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is important to gain more experience to win in some

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need teamwork. They

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with their friend. It is better to win in the

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by working together.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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competition
teamwork
individual sports
team sports
perseverance
resilience
goals
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responsibilities
social bonds
community
communicate
trust
group effort
balanced perspective
well-rounded skill set

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Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. discuss both views and give your opinion

medical professionals suah as doctors and nurses from poorer countries often migrate to rich countries. what problems arise from this situation? what measures can be taken to deal with it?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men eventhough the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50%female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain % of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some say that music, art, and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?