Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
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think that the teenage
years
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are the happiest times of most
people
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’s lives,
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others think that adult
life
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brings more happiness, in spite of greater
responsibilities
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. First of all, I would like to discuss the main factors in both opinions that make
such
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a difference. The main difference is age. During
teenage
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your teenage
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years
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years,
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you have
less
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fewer
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responsibilities
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,
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usually
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usually,
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you don't have a job yet,
you
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and you
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are living with your parents, which gives you more free
time
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to hang out with your friends.
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, at
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age you
deffinetely
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definitely
have
a
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apply
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better health to drink a
lot
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of
alcohole
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alcohol
and smoke some
cigaretes
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cigarettes
. In general, you are living
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the present without deep concerns about your future
life
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. I am only 22 and my teenage
years
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haven't gone yet. I
defenitely
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definitely
like my university
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and
schoole
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school
time
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as well. I had
meet
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a
lot
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of new
people
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, visited different cities, discovered new hobbies
etc
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, etc
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. The main advantage here comes with doing a
lot
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of new stuff and
discover
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discovering
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different places, just whatever
exept
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except
the
borring
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boring
daily routine
life
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, so over
time
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you
had
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have
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a
lot
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of memories and stories to tell and remember.
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, adult
life
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brings more
responsibilities
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.To my
mind
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mind,
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it's
more
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a more
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controversial statement, as many
people
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don't like to take a
lot
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of
responsibilities
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as well as
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build and think about their future
life
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. Many friends gone, less free
time
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and other factors
that
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apply
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may think that adult
life
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is
borring
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boring
. In conclusion, I would like to say that it's up to
people
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what to choose from.

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task response
State your clear view in the intro and end with a firm opinion. Keep one main idea in each paragraph and add a short closing sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make ideas link well. Use simple joins like and, but, also, for example. Start each paragraph with a clear topic idea and end with a short line.
content
You give some personal touch and some examples.
structure
You try to discuss both sides of the issue.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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