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As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have to started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent to do you agree with them? What alternative might there be to exploiting space for natural resources?

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It is pondered by certain people that human beings were responsible for emphasizing space
resources
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 unless
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 world had available
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 some people still believe that solutions should proceed in the world. In
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 essay, I will elucidate both views of
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 statement and a
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 to utilize
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 from the universe.
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 with, nowadays, humans are capable of going to the solar system
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 scientific knowledge’s improvement.
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, most scientists who are cautious about the lack of natural
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 are thinking about finding another
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 to keep
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 by getting from other planets in the solar system.
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, it might be a coal-like element
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in
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 Mars to use in the role of fuel to produce more energy in
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 world.
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,
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 will promote the feeling of safety and security if the spare energy sources become more available to be used.
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, the process of getting
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 from the universe might require an amount of energy and
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.
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, there are a number of irons and batteries needed to create a rocket and a launch place. It would be safer if people didn’t need to follow
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 solution and found another
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 to solve the problem. By the
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, waiting for meteorite fallings to earth might be the
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 to get solar system
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 by not having to launch a rocket but damage on the earth must occur in
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 circumstance and it might cause a life-threatening problem than not falling.
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, ways to get materials from space still waste both remaining
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 and time more than
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 other solutions on Earth.
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