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As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have to started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent to do you agree with them? What alternative might there be to exploiting space for natural resources?

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It is pondered by certain people that human beings were responsible for emphasizing space
resources
 unless
this
 world had available
resources
whereas
 some people still believe that solutions should proceed in the world. In
this
 essay, I will elucidate both views of
this
 statement and a
way
 to utilize
resources
 from the universe.
To begin
 with, nowadays, humans are capable of going to the solar system
due to
 scientific knowledge’s improvement.
Hence
, most scientists who are cautious about the lack of natural
resources
 are thinking about finding another
way
 to keep
resources
 by getting from other planets in the solar system.
For example
, it might be a coal-like element
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in
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 Mars to use in the role of fuel to produce more energy in
this
 world.
Moreover
,
this
 will promote the feeling of safety and security if the spare energy sources become more available to be used.
On the other hand
, the process of getting
resources
 from the universe might require an amount of energy and
resources
.
For instance
, there are a number of irons and batteries needed to create a rocket and a launch place. It would be safer if people didn’t need to follow
this
 solution and found another
way
 to solve the problem. By the
way
, waiting for meteorite fallings to earth might be the
way
 to get solar system
resources
 by not having to launch a rocket but damage on the earth must occur in
this
 circumstance and it might cause a life-threatening problem than not falling.
To conclude
, ways to get materials from space still waste both remaining
resources
 and time more than
to find
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 other solutions on Earth.
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