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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree

#school #students #influence
There is a saying that goes like "
One
 pen,
one
 book,
one
 teacher and
one
 school shapes the student'sstudent's life". Each and every
person
 on
this
 planet is encouraged to have a basic education so that he becomes a responsible citizen of the country going
further
. And
this
 can be achieved right from a young age in schools. I agree with the above context saying that disruptive
students
 have a negative influence on others. I think it is true. The actions of
one
person
 can surely influence others as well until and unless the
person
 who is getting affected is well aware of what he is doing. If it is
otherwise
 he will be misled and go on to become
one
 of them. For ,instance
students
 at a very young age will be exposed to different sorts of things through social media, movies and even the environment
also
 plays a big role. There was a boy at our school who happened to roam with people who were much older than him and he got into bad habits. His way of approach changed as he spent more time with them. Started to act rude, impolite and irresponsible.
This
also
 influenced the
students
 who were his friends from school. Being macho, loud and rude was kind of fun is what they had thought and tried to be
one
. But in ,reality it is not. For sure
students
 who are noisy and disobedient have to be taken care of in the schools. ,
Initially
Add a comma
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 they have to make them understand that the way they have chosen is whether right or wrong. Handle them with patience and in the right manner. If
this
 doesn't work out they have to be filtered from the others and should be guided separately. It is a difficult task but in the long ,run they will realize the importance of being a disruptive student is not an ideal thing to lead a good life. So
overall
 I would like to say that every
person
 has to enjoy life so much so that the
person
 will be well aware of his limits and be a responsible citizen for his country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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