Nowadays celebrities earn more money than policitans. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?
In
recents
years, the increase in entertainment demand Correct your spelling
recent
leads
to the appearance of many Wrong verb form
has led
celebrities
and the amount of money
they are received
Wrong verb form
receive
also
increases while
politicians are earned
less. Wrong verb form
earn
Although
it offers many career options, it is negative
development.
On the one hand, Add an article
a negative
increasesed
demand for entertainment leads to Correct your spelling
increased
celebrities
receiving more money
which has more advantages. The
Correct article usage
First
first,
it helps entertainment stars feel appreciated and gain a lot of reputation. For instance
, Dwayne Jonhson, who is one of the most famous Hollywood’s
Change noun form
Hollywood
actor
, most Fix the agreement mistake
actors
people
around the world know him including children, adults
and he is paid Correct word choice
and adults
huge
salary when he finishes filming a movie or doing a commercial. Correct article usage
a huge
Furthermore
, it can attract big human resoures
into the industry because they can earn more Correct your spelling
resources
money
than other professions. For example
, every year many famous people
appear on social networking platforms like tiktok
,Correct your spelling
TikTok
youtube
or Correct your spelling
YouTube
facebook
.
Capitalize word
Facebook
On the other hand
, the fact that politicians earn less than famous people
causes many problem
like they feel it is not worth the effort Change to a plural noun
problems
thay
put in because they have to Correct your spelling
they
commnicate
with presidents of other countries or Correct your spelling
communicate
in other words
they are the face of the country that benefit
the nation Change the verb form
benefits
while
celebrities
only bring personal profits that makes them unmotivated to do thier
job well. Correct your spelling
their
Besides
that, policitians
see that inadequacy will give rise to corruption or sell the secret of the nation. Correct your spelling
politicians
For example
, if policitians
see a balance of Correct your spelling
politicians
money
which
Change preposition
in which
celebrities
earn more than them, they will create a
corruption and Remove the article
apply
they
want to steal the nation’s Correct pronoun usage
apply
money
.
In conclusion, although
the fact that famous people
can earn more money
has many advantages but
when they earn more Remove the conjunction
apply
money
more policitians
which has more disadvantages.Correct your spelling
politicians
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