Child labour is considered to be one of the most serious problems ob the planet. What are the reasons why children find themselves in child labour and can be done to tackle this issue ?

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Child labour is considered to be one of the most serious problems ob the planet. What are the reasons why children find themselves in child labour and can be done to tackle this issue ?

Some people feel unsafe either staying at home or going out. What are the possible reasons for this? What can be done to address this issue?

Nowadays, some countries are spending a lot of money to make it easier to use bicycle. Why is this? Is it the best solution to transport problem?

Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Some people think younger leaders would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Dear Madam, I am Sarah. I live in Canada. I want to studying your training course and I do not know any information about the course. I am sure you can help me.