In many countries, people for things using mobile phone Apps is becoming increasing common. Dose this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Today
, the growth of tendencies of many
people
to use their own cell
phones
,especially the
Apps
related to
phones
is more. Actually, I think, it has some benefits and is awful for them in real life. On the one hand,
today
, the consumption of various things among
people
is rising, and finding comfortable ways to achieve them is an emphasized part of purchasing
people
. In fact, when technology has progressed more
today
than in the past,
people
tend to more use it in providing things or services that I mentioned before are necessary for them, so they install the main applicable
apps
on their
phones
and consume them easily.
For instance
, they will have a financial transition in a specific bank's application or have online banking on its related sites. On the other example, purchasing new clothes or furniture and stuff like
this
in online shops
apps
or sites is easier than spending more time in centre shops. In point of my view, giving the services or maybe taking them (for some
people
who are employees) can help
people
to find comfortable facilities or customers about their requirements. These kinds of benefits are important for many
people
On the other hand
, if I illustrate some disadvantages of using the
apps
on
people
's
phones
, I want to demonstrate them with some examples.
For instance
, the more progressing technology, the more increasing cybercriminals, even though, there is Privacy in the application, sten of information is possible, because of the lower privacy.
Also
,
today
the conceals are more developed among
people
who are Oriented to mobile waves which are dangerous to healthy
people
's lifestyles. To my mind,
furthermore
,
this
kind of advantages, we can not pay attention to creating relief from anxiety and monotony in more use it. In conclusion,in my opinion, regardless of the profits of cellphone
apps
, it's harmful especially to
people
's health is concerning, if
people
do not want to modify their time using
phones
.
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