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Some people think that Modern Technology is making people more sensible, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both points and give your opinion

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In the present day, technologies are everywhere around you from toothbrushes to transportation.It is becoming part of our life. In
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 essay, I will explain two sides of
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's thoughts. A few
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 said that technology in the present day improves knowledge if you use it correctly ,
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 someone
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 said it deteriorates society from human to human. As it could have both advantages and disadvantages.
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, the internet is one of the well-known innovations. Most
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 around the world can access the internet, so it is possible to learn something through mobile or laptop
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 of books in a library. There are several websites or platforms for you to choose from for learning.
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, you might get new information on the internet by accident but it might be good knowledge in the future.
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, someone could say that it would bring everyone out from each other. You can see numerous
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 use their phones most of the time. It is becoming one of the organs in human bodies. In some moments, they forget about a person in front of them, and even if they do not do it on purpose it could happen plenty of times.
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, there are new technologies every single day,
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, Chatgpt or robots. We have talked about both sides, as it could help
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 to learn new things, but
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 could make the social between
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 get worse. It has both benefits and drawbacks, so controlling yourself is the main point.
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