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some people think healthcare should be free for everyone others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #healthcare #costs
According to
 many individuals,
healthcare
 is obligated to be free,
while
 others consider that they should pay on their own. Both plots will be projected followed by my opinion. Many of us
are believing
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 that medical charges should not be taken for the following reasons : One of the most significant aspects is that everyone cannot pay the cost of
healthcare
 services, as they come from poorer backgrounds,
as
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for
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an
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example, those who are not able to fulfil at least their food scarcity, obviously cannot get
curement
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cement
current
 at
this
 handsome amount which results into unawareness from all remedies that can cure them which is why ministry should pay for their therapy quality which
further
 leads to provide more and more work for the home, will definitely boost the economy of the nation as a whole. Others acknowledge that they are responsible for their treatment because some of those are extremely high cost, Government is not responsible for some that, including plastic surgery,
it
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is not necessary to get but they desire to have, which accelerates their responsibility.
This
also
 unfolds their non-valueable behaviour, having no importance in their life, to exemplify, free
healthcare
 leads to carelessness for their well-being. In my opinion, in the case of
healthcare
 services, it should be categorised by poorer background and treatment as well. If those services are mandatory and highlight serious illness
then
 they should be non-chargeable for those who are not rich,
otherwise
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 unnecessary treatment should be chargeable, giving rise to having value for the Government's service.
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