The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the line graph illustrates data on how elderly people spent their leisure time from 1980 to 2010 in the United States.
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, hiking showed the highest rate
at the end
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of the
period
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. In 1980, 60% of people spent their free time watching TV and
this
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rate rose to just over 60% in 2010. Surfing the Internet showed the lowest point among the free time activities at the beginning of the
period
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. It started at approximately 5% and it showed a 10 times higher percentage in 2010. The percentage of reading activity showed some fluctuations. It started at 30% and it stayed at 60% in 2010. Compared with others , Hiking showed an upward trend. Its rate increased dramatically from 20% to 80%.
However
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, theatre indicated the second highest point at the beginning of the
period
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, it showed the lowest point
at the end
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of the
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. It began at 50% and stayed under 45 % in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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