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In recent times many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negative effects on society?

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Nowadays, many people argue that living alone is a better decision from many aspects, but is it true?
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 essay will discuss the main reasons for
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 phenomenon and its possible effects. In my opinion, the main two causes for
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 phenomenon are seeking privacy and looking for a unique lifestyle. In the beginning, let us demonstrate the first reason. It goes without saying that, privacy is a target which most people searching for it, and why? because if someone has his own private life, he will be able to choose and make decisions that fit his own purpose.
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 to that, we will find the second cause somehow is related to the first one. To illustrate, if an artist lives in his own apartment, most probably he designed it to match his needs;
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, privacy and a unique lifestyle are faces for the same coin.
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, I believe the possible effects of
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 decision on society include affecting both social relationships and people's mental health.
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, humans are not designed to live separately or far away from each other,
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, we need each other's support to ensure having a complete life cycle and mental stability.
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, when anyone has an issue, usually he will speak directly to one of his near friends or someone from his family seeking advice, by taking
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 action he will find a solution to that issue,
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 to that, it increases the bond of his social relationships.
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 the aforementioned causes and effects, I strongly believe that living alone is not the best decision that could be taken in favour of society,
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, its cons outweigh its pros.
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Task Response
In your essay, you have addressed the causes and effects of the phenomenon of living alone. You could improve the task response by extending your discussion and linking it more explicitly to the given question. Make sure to address all aspects of the prompt in a more structured manner.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay demonstrates some coherence and cohesion through the use of logical connectors and a clear progression of ideas. However, your introduction and conclusion could be more developed and meaningful. Additionally, ensure that your main points are adequately supported with relevant examples and explanations.
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