Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Developing the
economy
is a priority for
countries
worldwide and some believe
that is
impossible to achieve it with low environmental impact. In the remainder of
this
essay, both points of view will be explored and a logical conclusion will be drawn
at the end
. The development of the
economy
for many
countries
is related to the extraction of
mineral
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minerals
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or fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
Firstly
, the extraction of natural resource involves strong environmental impacts but history
show
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that
this
is the
quicky
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quick
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way to become
in
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a rich country.
For example
, was a poor country that previously found oil in the 1950s and nowadays, there are strong levels of development. Clearly, the extraction of fossil fuels can boost the
economy
of many
countries
. On the other
hand
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some
countries
try to
achieved
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prosperity through the
conservation
of their natural capital.
To begin
with, some governments making the decision to invest money in the
conservation
of forests and jungles. What is more, there are expect that
this
investment will boost the
economy
. To illustrate, Costa Rica is the best
economy
in Central America thanks to the
turist
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tourism
industry.
This
was evolved around
of
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natural parks and the
conservation
of flora and fauna. So, some cases show
that is
possible to get
economy
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the economy
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grow
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and avoid environmental impact. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, I admit that for many
countries
is
imposible
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impossible
to find
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a balanced
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balanced
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between
economy
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economic
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development and
environment
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environmental
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conservation
.
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