Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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government

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in some countries just care about the progress of the economy. Others think

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right but some people do not agree with

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problem. No one can deny the fact that economic progress made money to build infrastructure. If we had money, we would

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conditions to improve the education system. So that people can improve

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life

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more happiness. The most familiar example of

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Vietnam's

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was giving tax breaks to encourage multinational companies to build factories to have

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local products. It can

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argued that

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improving the economy, the

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needs to focus on the

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problem.

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in a

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environment with many toxic

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, they will have

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unsustainable way. A better example of

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company in Vietnam

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, because of the future of

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. In conclusion, The

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needs to focus not only on economic progress but

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other

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issues

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as environment and education to grow up sustainable.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

226 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

standard of living
sustainable development
social equality
environmental degradation
cultural heritage
technological innovation
wealth disparity
human development index
holistic approach
quality of life
economic prosperity
healthcare system
education system
cultural diversity
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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

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