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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart below presents how many
magazines
 were sold per
person
, between 2003, 2005, and 2007, in
atotal
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a total
total
 of five countries. We could say that eventually, in all
the
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five countries, the
number
 of
magazines
 sold decreased per
person
in
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every year, except
Country
 D.
Country
 A sold 49
magazines
 in 2003, but decreased to 43 the next year, and
also
 dropped to 39 in 2007.
Country
 A had very most significant decrease among
five
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 countries.
Country
 B, similar to the pattern of
Country
 A,
also
 had the highest
number
 of
magazines
 sold in 2003 with 50 copies, followed by a decreasing
number
 of 48 in 2005 and 43 exemplars in 2007. With 37 copies sold,
Country
 C marked its highest magazine sold in 2003 per
person
,
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 but decreased to 35 in 2005 and again, it declined in 2007 to only 32 pieces. The only exception,
it
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was
Country
 D, which started its selling with only 19
magazines
 per
person
 in 2003, followed by an increase to 20 amounts in 2005 per
person
, and rose to 25
magazines
 per
person
 in 2007.
Country
 E had the least
number
 of
magazines
 sold per
person
. They started with only an average of 5 numbers in 2003, increased just a little by 6 pieces, but dropped back to 5 average per
person
 in 2007. In conclusion, the trend showed a reduction in each
country
 from 2003 to 2007.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, person, number, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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