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Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to sudy or work in cities. Do you think the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

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Many
people
 are now moving from rural places to
cities
 for better study or work. I believe that the benefits of
this
 trend outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, life in
cities
 has its disadvantages.
For instance
, the cost of living in
cities
 is higher than in rural areas housing
in particular
 is very expensive.
As a result
, homelessness is becoming more common in
cities
. There are
also
 main problems like traffic congestion and some
people
 do not manage their work and commit a crime to survive.
Furthermore
, life in
cities
 can be stressful and
people
 do not have much time for themselves and their families which will result in the gap between family members.
On the other hand
, there are several advantages as well. Most of the universities are located in
cities
 and these universities attract ambitious students who want to obtain higher degrees.
Furthermore
, the job market in
cities
 is more active and
therefore
, it is much easier for professionals to find jobs there compared to the rural areas where the economic activities are limited.
To sum up
,
although
 the drawback of moving to
cities
 from rural areas is facing an expensive lifestyle, by living in
cities
 rural
people
 can get better degrees and jobs. I believe that the advantages of moving to
cities
 from rural places outweigh the disadvantages
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