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Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to sudy or work in cities. Do you think the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

#countries #people #areas #sudy #work #cities #outweight
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Many
people
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 are now moving from rural places to
cities
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 for better study or work. I believe that the benefits of
this
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 trend outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, life in
cities
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 has its disadvantages.
For instance
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, the cost of living in
cities
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 is higher than in rural areas housing
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 is very expensive.
As a result
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, homelessness is becoming more common in
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. There are
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 main problems like traffic congestion and some
people
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 do not manage their work and commit a crime to survive.
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, life in
cities
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 can be stressful and
people
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 do not have much time for themselves and their families which will result in the gap between family members.
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, there are several advantages as well. Most of the universities are located in
cities
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 and these universities attract ambitious students who want to obtain higher degrees.
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, the job market in
cities
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 is more active and
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, it is much easier for professionals to find jobs there compared to the rural areas where the economic activities are limited.
To sum up
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,
although
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 the drawback of moving to
cities
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 from rural areas is facing an expensive lifestyle, by living in
cities
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 rural
people
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 can get better degrees and jobs. I believe that the advantages of moving to
cities
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 from rural places outweigh the disadvantages
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