Nowadays people have to work for longer hours under stressful condition. To what extend do you agree or disagree above statement?

Modern society built a strong community where everyone can find a place for themselves.
However
, there are still a lot of workplaces where employers can not give great enough
work
conditions. I believe
this
situation will be changed someday. Long working days and the absence of comfortable personal space are some of the largest problems in the world. It may affect some people's ability to do their
job
correctly. Insomnia and lots of diseases
such
as fever, depression, and physical weakness may
also
be
due to
situations at
work
.
Furthermore
, most part of those inconveniences may be solved easily by the employer or by the HR department manager in several common steps.
Firstly
and most importantly, the number of workers needs to be corrected. If just one employee is doing the
work
of three unexisted people
then
that worker needs either to have an appropriate salary or the ability to correct their workday schedule. But it would be much easier to find several new coworkers and divide the amount of
work
for them equally or by their ability to do these or those tasks.
Secondly
, employers have to look after the vibe inside the company. If they can give an employee a great workplace and salary, but can not provide a friendly atmosphere,
then
there would be no advantages of all goods at a
job
, and an employee will either quit in the nearest time or they will become depressive and not do their
job
responsibilities correctly, on time, and fully involved.
To sum up
, any company must provide enough for employees to do their
job
great, whether we talk about the number of hours of
work
or personal computer at the office, uniforms if needed or paid holidays. Every type of
work
must be respected.
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