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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 closed
shops
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number
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 and the
statics
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statistics
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 of newly opened
shops
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 in a particular country from 2011 to 2018. We can get here, the started and Closed
shops
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 graph was always fluctuating. It never stood anywhere and never showed any stable situation. Though the opening rate was higher than
closing
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the closing
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 rate
but
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apply
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at
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in
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 the end the Sum of
opening
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the opening
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 was least. In 2011, the total of new
shops
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 opening
were
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was
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 about 8500 and faced
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decline
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a decline
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 the following year
about
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of about
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 4500 less in
number
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. Later, It Started uprising gradually and stood a bit up to 6000. Again, It witnessed a decrease and fell to 4000
then
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 no change had been seen without a tiny upward in 2018. In 2018, It fell again and the final sum was 3000. Here, the sum of closed
shop
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shops
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 in 2011 was nearly 6500 and faced a
decline
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 next year with a
number
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 of 6000.
Next
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The next
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 year, It rose
about
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to about
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 1100 and again fell to 6500 in 2014. It faced a sharp downfall and stood under 1000 in 2015. Later, It soared to 5100 in 2016. Afterward, It witnessed a tiny
decline
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 and rise and became as same as 2016 in 2018. In 2017, the
decline
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 was nearly 100 in
number
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, decline with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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