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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
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people
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 can not afford to socialize with their neighbours
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 they live in the same neighbourhood since they are busy to end their meetings. There are some reasons why they are not able to meet one another frequently and
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 some solutions on how to improve the greeting rate. First of all, it can be seen that numerous causes might decrease
people
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’s social time with their familiar
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 who live near them.
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, they do not have enough time to visit or invite somebody as a guest , who occupies their home as ,actually they have to work long hours to gain money and the best lifestyle which they want.
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, it can be guessed that the residents tend to have some offenders who break the law. That’s why unbelief dominates among occupants to talking to strangers in their area.
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, there may be some solutions that can increase the rate of socializing among
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 living in the same neighbourhood. Social organizations should emphasize gathering neighbours to greet frequently by taking place in social events.
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, the security system can be focused on by the chief of the buildings who is responsible for residents of these buildings, to create safe policy facilities. It can rise that
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 can believe one another and go to see them in frequent rapids.
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, for communicating with strangers in their area
people
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 can create some mitigations which encourage them to meet and have time with their neighbours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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