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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems To whatextent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#country #language #whatextent
Social networking sites,
such
 as Instagram, Twitter and Facebook, have become an important part of
people
's lives in recent years.
While
 some argue that they have had a negative impact on society, I believe that their influence is not so negative. One of the main
problem
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that
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is that
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people
 started to communicate face to face less. It is true that some
people
 can spend excessive amounts of time on these social nets.
However
, it is important to note that these platforms
also
 provide opportunities to communicate with friends and family who are so far away.
Also
, social nets can bring together
people
 with similar interests.
People
 think that social nets
distracted
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 mental health
especially
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 among teenagers.
Moreover
, it’s influenced
in
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our eyesight, back and brain activity. To be honest, SN take a lot of time and often teenagers prefer chatting,
watching
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and watching
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 reels
instead
 of doing homework and studying. So, it’s a pity
cause
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 they don’t want to learn something new and they live in
virtual
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the virtual
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 world. SN relieve the spread of information allowing
people
 all over the world to be heard. In
a
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 case of natural disasters or political
conflicts
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 social media has served as a platform for providing assistance. In conclusion,
while
 some argue that social networking sites have had a significantly negative impact on society, I believe that their influence is not so damaging. Social media provides us
a
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lot of opportunities
for
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to
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 be creative and famous.
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