Prision is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are various crimes and different punishments nowadays
thus
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imprisonment is the one of
punishment
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methods for offences.
This
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essay will discuss both sides of
prisonation
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presentation
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and give examples and my opinion on that statement.
Firstly
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, there are various punishments were introduced by the government for criminals. It might
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a fine to the
prison
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. If some
people
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did minor offenses
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as wrong parking or high speed we should not give imprisonment as his or her
punishment
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. The police officers advised or prescribed a fine as their
punishment
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.
However
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, if someone kills
people
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we must punish that person
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admitted to
prison
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. In that time
prison
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is the best solution for
punishment
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.
On the other hand
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, always
prison
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is not suitable for all offenders. Because
people
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have different mind levels
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those offenders might be cruel and stressed in the prisons. Sometimes they are affected by depression like mental disorders. If we send those
people
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to either the probation centres or the rehabilitation centres it might be a good decision than
prison
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.
Moreover
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, all of us have a responsibility to guide our children from birth to become good adults in the future. As parents and
teachers
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teachers,
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we should give good education to children about discipline and law. In conclusion,
this
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essay discussed both the pros and cons of
prison
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as the best
punishment
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method for offences nowadays and gave examples. I strongly believe, that imprisonment is not the best way to
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punishment
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punish
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and we can manage it in different ways as probation, a fine, rehabilitation and education than
prison
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.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion (agree or disagree) on the statement as it helps readers understand your perspective right away.
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Try to improve the overall organization of your essay by using clearer topic sentences and transition phrases, so each paragraph flows better into the next.
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Expand on your examples and explain how they support your argument more thoroughly. This strengthens your points and shows a deeper understanding of the topic.
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You provide a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
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You have a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion and the main points of your essay, which is good practice for IELTS writing.
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