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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In global life, many hi-tech devices have been invented and it leads to a reality that many online applications are operated to bring to
people
's lives more convenience. In my point of view, I think the
Internet
 both brings pros
as well as
 cons to
people
's lives.
Firstly
, on the one hand,
people
 can make more friends through many apps on their phones.
For instance
, they are afraid to meet and talk face to face with someone, some apps
such
 as Facebook, Messenger or Zalo can help them to have a conversation only through text messages. They will have more good friends and confide in that friend without having to meet directly. The second reason to explain why the
Internet
 made life more convenient is that many students, especially those who are studying at university, gain useful knowledge by using the
Internet
instead
 of looking for
some
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books to access. Nowadays, young generations tend to use their phones or computers to learn new things.
This
 somewhat shows the vital role of technology in their life.
On the other hand
, there are a few negative impacts and the most remarkable one is that an individual's personal information might be lost. There are many online frauds on the
internet
 today and the user's nicks can be hacked.
This
 is the clearest situation which indicates the drawbacks of the cyber world. In conclusion, I believe that the
internet
 might encourage
people
 to get on well with someone and learn some interesting things, despite there are still a few online crimes It is expected that
people
 should install apps which have high security and a policy should be introduced by the government to prevent frauds on the
internet
.
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