The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

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The above pie chart and graphs depict the expected residing period for foreigners in the United

kingdom

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and the possible causes for moving to the United Kingdom.

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, most people wish to stay in the country

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for up

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to two

years

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and

majority

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the majority

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are

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coming to the UK for work purposes. 38% of immigrants are visiting with the intention to work in the UK which is the highest percentage

while

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7% gave no reason for their move-in and another 7% suggested other means.

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, from year 2000 to

2008

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,2008

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the population who wish to remain in the country for 4 or more

years

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remain steady at 150.

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, the crowd to

reside

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residing

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for more

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than 4

years

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gradually increased from 150 to 250 in the

years

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apply

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2000 to 2004.

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, that remained unchanged at 250 till 2008.

In addition

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, immigrant lodging

length

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lengths

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of 2 to 4

years

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do not show a significant increase

during

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from

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2000 to 2008.

Furthermore

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, 16% of people have visited the United Kingdom with their family.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

168 words

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