The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.
The above pie chart and graphs depict the expected residing period for foreigners in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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and the possible causes for moving to the United Kingdom.
Overall
, most people wish to stay in the country
up
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for up
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to two
years
and
majority
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the majority
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is
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coming to the UK for work purposes. 38% of immigrants are visiting with the intention to work in the UK which is the highest percentage
while
7% gave no reason for their move-in and another 7% suggested other means.
Moreover
, from year 2000 to
2008
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,2008
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the population who wish to remain in the country for 4 or more
years
remain steady at 150.
However
, the crowd to
reside
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more
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than 4
years
gradually increased from 150 to 250 in the
years
of
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apply
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2000 to 2004.
Thereafter
, that remained unchanged at 250 till 2008.
In addition
, immigrant lodging
length
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lengths
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of 2 to 4
years
do not show a significant increase
during
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from
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2000 to 2008.
Furthermore
, 16% of people have visited the United Kingdom with their family.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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