Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

I hope

this

letter finds you well. I'

writing

this

letter to give you some exciting news that can bring joy to your face. Could you guess? Well, I'

selling my Lexus Model 2013 car which is your favourite and most desirable mode of transportation. You will be more glad after knowing that I'

going to buy a new Tesla on my birthday next month. To avoid unnecessary insurance fees, I'

thinking of selling it. You are already aware of the good and bad points about it because you drove my car on our

last

vacation to Wasaga Beach. Still, I want to remind you that

this

automobile has a V6 engine and it is a four-way drive.

Additionally

, it comes with all seasonal tires. Because of its high-performance engine, it's easy to drive it even during tremendous snowfall. The only demerit point is it has driven over 160K Km. You have been invited to my birthday party on October 30th. I would suggest you come early one or two days and keep the car with you for a few days. If everything seems fine, you can buy it at a reasonable price. I'

excited to see you soon! With love Sandy

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

202 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Full-time university students need to spend most of their time studying. Some people, however, claim that students needed to be involved in other activities as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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