Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

I hope

this

letter finds you well. I'

writing

this

letter to give you some exciting news that can bring joy to your face. Could you guess? Well, I'

selling my Lexus Model 2013 car which is your favourite and most desirable mode of transportation. You will be more glad after knowing that I'

going to buy a new Tesla on my birthday next month. To avoid unnecessary insurance fees, I'

thinking of selling it. You are already aware of the good and bad points about it because you drove my car on our

last

vacation to Wasaga Beach. Still, I want to remind you that

this

automobile has a V6 engine and it is a four-way drive.

Additionally

, it comes with all seasonal tires. Because of its high-performance engine, it's easy to drive it even during tremendous snowfall. The only demerit point is it has driven over 160K Km. You have been invited to my birthday party on October 30th. I would suggest you come early one or two days and keep the car with you for a few days. If everything seems fine, you can buy it at a reasonable price. I'

excited to see you soon! With love Sandy

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

202 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools, especially at the preschool level. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In the future, more people will chose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holidays. Do you agree or disagree?

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.