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Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part-time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing so?

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Some parents encourage their kids to work part-
time
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 in their leisure
time
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. The primary advantage is the job
experience
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 they gain, and the main drawback is the lack of
time
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 for education. One obvious advantage for young individuals who work part-
time
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 is the extensive
experience
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 they get.
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 positions are often transitory, which means that employees accept a variety of offers before they reach adulthood, exposing them to a variety of professions and sectors at a young age. When they seek
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jobs as adults, they will have a major edge over others because most businesses prefer individuals with past
experience
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 as it decreases the cost and length of training.
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,prior to graduating, I worked for nine years, which helped me land a job at Mojarto, India’s most prestigious art and design gallery. Minors serving part-
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,
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, face a disadvantage. They do not spend the whole day attending school or college in completing their obligations
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, they may not have enough
time
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 to devote to their academic studies, which may result in their failing or receiving poor marks.
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 when people seek
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jobs later in life since some employers prefer applicants with a strong academic background.
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, one of my colleagues who worked
while
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 attending school failed in his endeavour to become the CEO of the Tim-Hortons solely
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, the immense
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 children gain from part-
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 work is a critical advantage
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, but lacking the
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 to study is a severe drawback
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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