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For countries, importantparts of education have remained such as reading, writing and math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be mande as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree.

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Over the past few decades, the world has evolved, and substantial changes can be observed in digital
technology
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. Generally in the
education
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system
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 countries are mainly concerned with reading, writing, and math.
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 some people are now concerned about including
computer
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literacy
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 into the
education
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system
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 as the next skill. From my point of view, I
also
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 agree with enhancing
competency
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 in
computer
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literacy
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 among school children. Digital
technology
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 now plays a major role in every field of the world including the
education
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 field. Because of that now most reference materials are available in e-version other than printed books. Because of that students can easily find their reference material without wasting their time and It will lead to gathering more extra knowledge in their field. Other than e-books, digital
technology
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 is involved in distance learning, analysis, data collection etc... .
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 during the COVID period
education
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system
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 mainly depended on digital
technology
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. Because a lot of countries implement lockdown periods to control the spreading of covid 19. So students and teachers were not allowed to attend schools. But for the sake of digital
technology
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education
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system
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 didn't collapse.
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, the present job market is
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 dependent on digital
technology
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. Now
competency
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 in
computer
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literacy
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 is an essential skill for most jobs in the world. For ,instance nowadays general secretary can't perform their duties without
computer
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literacy
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,
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 higher professions like doctors and engineers
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 can't perform their duties without
computer
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literacy
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.
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competency
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 in
computer
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literacy
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 must be improved through
education
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. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that students need
competency
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 in
computer
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 skills
along with
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 reading,writing, and math.
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