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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the present era, were latest technology and methods of sale and purchase are changing the lives of customers. I totally agree with the idea that
e- commerce
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e-commerce
 has totally rerouted the method of trade. The lives of people before the internet and gadgets were completely different,
so
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and so
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 were the ways of selling and purchasing.
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 - if a person needs to buy a pair of pants,
then
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 he must go to a clothing store or a shop to make a purchase, without comparing the
price
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 with other sellers, who might be selling at a lower
price
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, unless he visits them all to compare the
price
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. With the arrival of
internet
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 and it being accessible on devices like
phone
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phones
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 and
computer
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computers
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 which makes it
easier
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is easier
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 for
consumer
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consumers
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 can view
product-line
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product lines
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 on one platform.
This
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 in return helps
consumers
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 to locate and compare the product of their need with various
price
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range
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ranges
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 and
variety
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a variety
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 of styles without getting out of the comfort of their house or office. Now the presence of technology can be seen everywhere, the kiosk machines at fast-food restaurants, airports,
railway
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and railway
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 stations to name a few.
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, if a person goes to a railway station where there are hundreds of people who need to purchase tickets, with few railway employees selling tickets, it will result in many
consumers
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 missing their trains. With the help of kiosk machines, the purchasing and selling of tickets become smooth and efficient as the
Userfriendly
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User-friendly
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 interface makes it easy for transactions.
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, it can be said that the introduction of robust technology and new methods of interaction
among
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between
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 buyer and seller has revolutionized the life of
consumers
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 as it is easy to use and is available in every corner of the world which
save
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saves
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 both time and
efforts
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effort
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 of
consumers
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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