You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers.

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Dear Tom, I am writing a letter to inform you that I may not be able to do

night

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class course. For your information, I have a

full time

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worker at Teyes Brothers and I am working

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the

night

shift cleaning the whole building to make sure everything is sanitising. I

got

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a hectic schedule which makes me

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busy and I would not be able to

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have

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spare time

night

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for night

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study.

Therefore

, I am asking if I could quit the course

due to

the deduction fee from my personal account

and

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I do not want to waste money and I do not have time to study.

Moreover

, I have

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three daughters and two sons and my wife got

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cancer. I have issues now

thus

my family

is prioritise

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is prioritised

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however

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; I need to save more money for them. I hope everything will be okay from your side

that

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I am going to drop

evening

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the evening

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course for the sake of my family. I appreciate your help and let me know if you have any questions regarding

quiting

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quitting

night

class. yours', Sincerely, Tokateti Totoki

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

187 words

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