Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

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Over the past few
decades
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international trips have grown drastically. There are few
people
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who are interested in travelling to other
countries
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. There is another category of
people
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who are willing to go for popular spots in their own country. In my opinion,I would prefer to be in my own place rather than overseas. Any kind of trip makes the person mentally very strong and healthy. The majority of
people
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to try visit
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tourist spots in their respective
countries
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first.
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it is very cost-effective. There will be no need for a visa or passport . Many of the visiting places which we can find in other
countries
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we can find in our very own place. There are some unique places which we can't find.
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, the Taj Mahal is
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unique place because it is one of the seven wonders of the
world
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. Which we can't find in other parts of the
world
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. There are some
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who are
well liked
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to travel across the
world
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.
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, there are travel vloggers who are interested in travelling they can go for a
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trip. By travelling to other
countries
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we can find many difficulties like language,money,restrictions and many more. If there are any illiterate
people
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always find it difficult
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lack of studies.
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it is more expensive in foreign
countries
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for basic needs too. In conclusion,
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it is safe and comfortable to find popular places and visit inside our own country.
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to
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,
it
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it will be very easy to recommend to our friends and family members.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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