The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

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The display graph,

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the chart, gives data about

migration

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to the UK. The graph describes how long immigrants in the

years

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2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK and the pie chart describes the reasons for

migration

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in 2008. In 2 to 4

years

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, in 2000, there were around 50

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later by the

year

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2008, it was 100. In 4 or more

years

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, in the

year

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2000, there were around 150 but later by the

year

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2008 it was

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150. In 2 to 4

years

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, in the

year

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2001, there were nearly 150

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it increased by more than 250 in the

year

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2008. Reasons for

migration

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, in the

year

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2008 the data is in % immigrants. The main

reason

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was work with 38%,

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study

reason

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32%, because of accompany/joining family there were 16% and other

reason

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and

also

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reason

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stated was 7%.

To conclude

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, the above describes the length of stay of immigrants to the UK from 2000 to 2008 and the

reason

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for

migration

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, in 2008.

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The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

Governments in many countries are replacing old buildings such as art galleries and town halls with new ones. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The quality of computer language has improved significantly in recent years. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn foreign languages. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.