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For countries, importantparts of education have remained such as reading, writing and math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be mande as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree.

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Nowadays some parts of the world, for their curriculums are still reading, writing and math.
Due to
 the advanced ,
technology
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 we have. Most of the population is considering adding
computer
skills
 as an extra subject in their syllabuses. I completely agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay will discuss the reasons.
To begin
 with,
computer
skills
 offer a lot of opportunities ,especially for
students
.
Thus
, with these ,
skills
 most teenagers are engaged in their studies. There are different factors why schools should add a new subject to our curriculum.
Firstly
, recently all over the ,,,world we experienced a pandemic and every one of us depends on technology and it is a part of our lifestyle. At that time
students
 needed to attend their classes through online platforms.
However
, many
students
 are unable to operate the
computer
as well as
 parents, to avoid
this
 kind of problem teachers need to teach
students
 how to use the
computer
.
For example
, many corporate companies and schools are conducting various meetings for
this
 situation we need to train them on how to download apps
such
 as Zoom or Skype and how to use them.
On the other hand
, some of the pupils are misusing
this
 freedom they are spending their time in games or other entertainment rather than improving their
skills
. In
this
 ,case children start to lose their importance in studies. Teachers and parents need to keep an eye on learners if they using the
skills
 for the right purpose.
To sum up
,
although
computer
skills
 offer us opportunities and knowledge to grow our career throughout our learning period or working hours. But some of them use them for entertainment purposes. In both cases it is a great skill and all over the earth should start as an important subject.
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