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Discuss the Advantages & Advantages of living & Working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, most people work in a foreign
country
.
This
 essay will examine the advantages
such
 as learning a new
language
 and the disadvantages
likewise
 missing family and friends.
To begin
 with, people turn to work abroad because it provides workers with different experiences.
In other words
,dealing with hard situations alone in a different culture will
gives
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 individuals the knowledge and background that they need to have
the
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a
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 variety of experiences
Moreover
, living and
communicat
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communicate
communicating
 with foreign citizens will help them
to
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acquire the
language
 faster because they
had
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have
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 a conversation daily with foreign citizens so each day they learned new vocabulary.
For instance
, a survey done in 2023, at Sultan Qaboos University showed that 60% of Omani workers learned their second
language
 faster when they
work
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worked
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 in a foreign
language
On the other hand
, spending time
a way
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away
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 from family and friends
increase
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 the feeling of lonely.
While
 individuals feel comfortable in his or her community
due to
 they
found
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some one
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someone
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 to share with
hem
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them
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 the happiness and sadness moment.
For example
,
according to
 Oman
TV
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,TV
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 50% of immigrants had
a
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depression after 10 years from
thy
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they
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 left their
country
.
Other
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 drawback is the cost of the life is high because they need to rent a flat and pay a lot for transportation .
Whereas
,
at
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in
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 their
country
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,country
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 they had their own house and car. In conclusion,
although
 there are some benefits of working in a foreign
country
such
 as
had
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having
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 an experience and
acquire
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acquiring
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second
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language
 ,there are some drawbacks
also
likewise
,missing family and the lives out said
you
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your
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country
 expensive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quality education
  • high standard of living
  • diverse cultures
  • strong healthcare system
  • career advancement
  • safe and stable environment
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