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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#information #temperatures #degrees #celsius #°c #rainfall #month #two #australian #cities #report #university #lecturer #summarise #features #comparisons
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The given graph and bar chart
shows
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 information about average daily temperatures and
rainfall
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 in
Brisbane
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 and Canada within a
year
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.
Overal
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,
Brisbane
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 is far heat in temperature than
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Canbera
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Canberra
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also
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experincing
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experiencing
 high
rainfal
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rainfall
in
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early
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 and end of the
year
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.
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 the data,
maximum
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tempetarure
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temperature
 of
Brisbane
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 city
almost
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 30
degree
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degrees
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 celcius
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the
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mininum
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minimum
just
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 about 11
degree
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degrees
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 celcius in
mid-
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year
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have
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highest
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number of
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rainfall
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 which is 2 fold higher than
Canbera
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 from January to April
while
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in
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Juni
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June
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 to September
rainfall
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 number
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 lower than
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Canbera
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 city. In the
last
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 two
month
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months
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 of the
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year
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,year
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rainfall
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 duration is
back
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apply
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getting higher.
How ever
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,
Canbera
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in
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 far humid even
reach
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the
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 lowest temperature
to
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degree
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degrees
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 celcius
in
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from
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Juni
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June
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 to August. The average
rainfall
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 is lower than
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Brisbane
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in Brisbane
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;
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however
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 in the
mid
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middle
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 of
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year
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the year
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 the frequency
far
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 higher and stable, even though it
getting
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gets
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 higher to 10 to 12 days
during
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 November to December.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, brisbane, year, canbera with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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