The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given graph and bar chart
shows
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information about average daily temperatures and
rainfall
in
Brisbane
and Canada within a
year
.
Overal
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,
Brisbane
is far heat in temperature than
Canbera
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Canberra
and
also
experincing
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experiencing
high
rainfal
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rainfall
in
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at
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early
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and end of the
year
.
According to
the data,
maximum
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the maximum
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tempetarure
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temperature
of
Brisbane
city
almost
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is almost
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30
degree
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degrees
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celcius
wich
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which
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the
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is the
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mininum
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minimum
just
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about 11
degree
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degrees
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celcius in
mid-
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mid-year
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year
.
Moreover
, it
also
have
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highest
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the highest
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number of
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rainfall
which is 2 fold higher than
Canbera
from January to April
while
in
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from
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Juni
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June
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to September
rainfall
number
getting
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is
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lower than
Canbera
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in Canbera
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city. In the
last
two
month
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months
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of the
year
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,year
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rainfall
duration is
back
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apply
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getting higher.
How ever
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However
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,
Canbera
in
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is
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far humid even
reach
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reaching
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the
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its
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lowest temperature
to
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of
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0
degree
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degrees
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celcius
in
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from
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Juni
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June
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to August. The average
rainfall
is lower than
Brisbane
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in Brisbane
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;
however
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,however
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in the
mid
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middle
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of
year
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the year
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the frequency
far
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is far
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higher and stable, even though it
getting
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higher to 10 to 12 days
during
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from
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November to December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, brisbane, year, canbera with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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