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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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People
 from around the world are leaving rural fields and becoming city residents causing
population
 decrease in rural
areas
.
Although
 the
urbanization
process
 has some negative consequences, the positive impact overweight those consequences.
While
 moving to
cities
people
 from rural
areas
 may overpopulate those
cities
. Overpopulation in its turn tends to create traffic congestion, and the city itself may not be able to function properly. Some metropolises are usually designed for some amount of
population
;
thus
, overpopulation means a lack of accommodation, electricity shortages and a lack of water supply.
Furthermore
, the
urbanization
process
 decreases the
population
 in remote
areas
 which
then
 leads to a decline in agricultural production.
In other words
, fewer
people
 in rural
areas
 might not be able to provide sufficient amounts of agricultural products
such
 as crops, grain, vegetables and cattle. With regards to the advantages of the
urbanization
process
,
community
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 from remote locations will access high living conditions and appropriate jobs and education in
cities
. There is no surprise that residents of
cities
 can obtain higher education and work at high-paying jobs compared to
people
 from villages.
Consequently
, if
people
 from rural
areas
 get appropriate education the average qualification level among citizens of a country will rise.
As a result
, the number of qualified specialists will increase and with it the economy of the country.
To conclude
, the abrupt
urbanization
 growth might lead to overpopulation of
cities
 and a lack of agricultural products, though a slow and gradual
urbanization
process
 which would take place with the adaptation of
cities
 to increased
population
 will improve the average qualification level of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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