Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should work in the country where they did their training. Other believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that
professionals
,
such
as physicians and technicians, should
work
in the
country
where they received their education,
while
others
thought
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that it should depend on their choice
,
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if they want to
work
in another
country
.
Although
working in
an other
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country
give
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them freedom,
but
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I believe that
professionals
should
work
in the
country
from where they graduated. Literate people, like doctors and engineers, should
work
in the
country
from where they completed their education because it's their duty to serve their
country
.
This
is to say
,
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that, government
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government
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the government
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had
spend
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a huge amount of money on their training. So, now it is their responsibility to give back to their
country
.
For instance
, in developing
countries
, sometimes there is a shortage of skilled workers, So,
this
school of thought that
professionals
should
work
in their
country
must
fulfill
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that gap.
On the other hand
,
professionals
should
free
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to
work
in any
country
they want because it
give
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them
independency
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.
Moreover
,
by
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working in
an other
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another
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country
would make them share their knowledge with other professional people.
For example
,
according to
university research, educated individuals who
work
in other
countries
have more advanced knowledge related to their field because they
work
in different situations, with various people from diverse
background
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. Despite
this
, I strongly believe that working in their own
countries
is more beneficial for themselves or for their
countries
. In conclusion,
professionals
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professionals'
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desire
of working
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to work
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in
an other
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another
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country
is good for their own future but
this
thing will not give any kind of advantage to their own
country
.
That is
why,I stand with the viewpoint of working in their own
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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