In some countries fast food restaurants and supermarket gives money to schools to promote their products. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

It is common to see the growth in commercial advertisements of fast

food

chains and

supermarket

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to be displayed at

schools

in some countries.

While

this

can be a clever way to promote the products,

this

kind of advertising, in my opinion, is unconstitutional and it will have negative impacts on the younger generation. On the one hand, fast

food

and

supermarket

promotions with the targeted audiences of

students

will have negative influences on their lifestyle and diet. One of the most prominent

point

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to discuss is that

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students

, especially young ones, love to eat junk foods and sweets.

Therefore

, many fast

food

restaurants and

supermarket

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supermarkets

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will tend to commercialize unhealthy

food

such

as chocolate, french fries, hamburger and many more.

Hence

,

this

will increase the

students

' demand

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fast foods and junk foods, exposing them to many other crucial problems.

For instance

, increasing children's sugar and fat consumption can result in obesity and many other chronic diseases

such

as diabetes and high blood pressure.

On the other hand

,

this

is unconstitutional and illegal because

schools

can not use their learners as a way to produce income. Regarding the fact that

schools

accept

the

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money from those companies and expose children to a detrimental diet and lifestyle,

this

can be considered an act of corruption.

Therefore

, if

schools

were to make income by

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their

students

, they had to at least verify the benefits and negative effects of what would be displayed.

As a result

,

schools

should only accept the deals of advertisements that can

benefits

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students

such

as

universities

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scholarships,

extra-curriculum

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extracurricular

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courses and education books. In conclusion, commercializing fast

food

and

supermarket

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within

schools

is happening in some countries. In fact, those advertisements are

inapproriate

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inappropriate

and can lead to many other health problems which are, in my opinion, significant and detrimental.