The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.
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The bar chart shows the changes in
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proportion
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the proportion
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of people who lived in urban areas in various
part
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of the globe from 1950 to 2050.
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, the total number of people who lived in urban areas increased
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. The North American have the highest percentage of population amongst all others for
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all three periods.
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the African have the lowest
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to others, they recorded a sharp increase within the periods. Looking into details , 64% of the North
American
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Americans
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lived in the city in 1950. It increased slightly to 79% in 2000 and hit
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peak in 2050
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just below 90%. It is
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the highest
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amongst all other locations and
period
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periods
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. The
African
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Africans
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who have the lowest
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compare
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to all other countries got only 15% of people
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in the urban areas in 1950. It increased sharply from 15% to 37% in 2000 and rose significantly to 62% in 2050 with only 4% less than the second
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area Aisa.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • regions
  • trends
  • global
  • increase/decrease
  • patterns
  • compare/contrast
  • noteworthy
  • industrialization
  • economic factors
  • migration
  • government policies
  • bar chart illustrates
  • overall trend
  • noticeable
  • particularly
  • summarize
  • highlight
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