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The amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan

The amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan
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The pie chart illustrates what are the sources of revenue and expenditures in 2016 from a children’s charity in the USA. The first graph exhibits the money that
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 donation got in 2016 and who contributed to it. The biggest source was the donation of food with 86,5 %. Followed by community contributions with 10.4 %.
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, they received a small number of charities from the program funds with 2.2 %. It had an insignificant income from investment income, and government grants with 0.2 %, each. On the other side, we can see the illustration of the expenditures. Program services
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 the most significant expenditure in
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 children’s donation with 95.8% .
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, we can see
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small spending on fundraising with 2.5 % and management and general with 1.6 %
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, the total of credit sources was 53.352.034, and it was spent 53.224,990.
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, the amount of money received and spent it’s almost the same.
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, all the revenue sources are covering all the bills of
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 charity company.
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