Young people committing crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, criminal cases have been significantly increasing not only committed by grown-up people but
also
by
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. The main problem occurs regarding whether their
crimes
should be treated equally or not
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the law perspective.
Adolescent
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who committed
crimes
should have the same punishments
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adults in justice. From my standpoint, I agree with
this
notion that
adolescent
’s
misdeed
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misdeeds
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should not be discriminatory in terms of
justice
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system.
While
doing the
crime
, people tend to know the consequences of their
action
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actions
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. Importantly, punishment is necessary to apply
for
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all people, the youth is no exception. Having perpetrator
to
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face the consequences
is
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that they are fully aware of their wrongdoings and not
to
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do the same misdeed in the future.
For example
, there was a hot topic
cases
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in Indonesia about
adolescent
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an adolescent
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14 years old did
murder
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to
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a child 11 years old
due to
the perpetrator
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to sell the
children’s
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child’s
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kidney. Since
this
is a serious
crime
,
perpetrator
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the perpetrator
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should be sentenced with
the
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heavy punishment regardless of their age.
Beside
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a
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serious
crime
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crimes
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committed by
adolescent
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adolescents
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,
misdeed
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misdeeds
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that
been
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taken
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committed
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by them
also
should
apply
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be
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proper punishment.
For instance
,
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petty
crimes
such
as fighting,
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alcohol, robbery or others should be punished with lenient sentences based on their wrong act.
Therefore
, they are fully aware that petty
crimes
also
have a consequence in legal. In conclusion, all
crimes
should be punishable equally without
distinguish
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irrespective of the age of
criminal
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the criminal
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in order to reduce
the
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crime
in society
for
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in
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the future by considering the severity of the
crime
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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