The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.

The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.
The line graph displays information about the common
temperature
in three different cities and different months. and the table shows the whole sunshine
hours
for them.
Overall
, the highest
temperature
in summer was reported in New
York
and the one for winter was reported for
Sydney
.
Furthermore
, New
York
has far more
hours
of sunshine on sunny days. In January, the
temperature
for
Sydney
was the highest, with almost 25.
However
, in
this
month, the typical
temperature
of New
York
and London was almost one-fifth and two-thirds of
Sydney
respectively. Between August and September, the common
temperature
in New
York
picked at just below 30.
Similarly
, in
this
period, the
temperature
of London made its peak at around 23,
while
the lowest
temperature
was reported in
Sydney
at approximately 13. New
York
had the highest total
hours
of sunshine with around 2,500
hours
,
while
London had the least with 1180
hours
. The one reported for
Sydney
was a little less than New
York
, with approximately 2400
hours
.
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